SO. I may have binge read everything you've written for this story yesterday, but now comes the "going back to my favorite parts and leaving comments" time.
And here's where I started getting invested in the fic! Chapter one was intriguing, but this was where I started to really feel your dedication to world building that remains consistent throughout what you've written so far!
Also of note to me was this line!: "...interior color that showed through Stavalblook’s nacreous green tint: one was shell-interior pink, another yolk-yellow, and the third pure colloidal white"
Like WOW! Your language is so descriptive and specific that I was able to have really vivid images while reading. I could practically see Stavalblook's iridescent rainbow-green, and baby Hapsta already sounds like a precious shade of pink.
Okay, onto chapter three! I hope you don't mind me flooding any notifications you have on...
I'm joyful when I get notifications -- so don't apologize; comment as much as you like! I really appreciate that you're taking the time to write such thoughtful comments -- thank you!
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