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  1. Yin on Chapter 16 Sun 18 Feb 2018 12:50AM UTC

    This was another absolutely fantastic and emotional update, through s d through. :D

    As always, my heart is still going out so much to Grif...even with all of the time that has passed by and his own inner doubts and torments about why the others haven’t come yet to rescue him, he still misses Simmons and the rest of the gang quite a bit. I loved the references to that throughout the narrative, and it always pulled on my heartstrings when it happened (I swear, Grif, Simmons and the others want to find you! ❤️). Him still trying to cope with the knowledge of what Temple and the others are up to currently while their revenge plan is underway is also really heartbreaking too, since he does feel so powerless at the moment to alter it. Grif having to clean Temple’s helmets and realizing what it meant that some were already missing was a very poignant example of that.

    You did a great job really showcasing just how damaged Temple is with his reaction to the anniversary of Biff’s death, and also reminding everyone of just how dangerous and reactionary he can be with his “order” to Grif to put on Biff’s helmet and just be quiet for a moment. Likewise, his comment about what orange soldiers are meant to do just...wowza, that was another punch to the gut in a way.

    Loco continues to be someone I just want to wrap up in hugs right alongside Grif—his comment about not liking playing Capture the Flag anymore was just very emotional and insightful.

    And the conversation Grif had with Gene about time travel was really rather telling and curiosity-piquing too. :) I totally didn’t see the Shelly mistaking Grif for Biff when he wore the helmet...but I LOVED how that tied into her constantly scanning Grif before in the story, and it makes me rather curious to see if he can somehow use that to perhaps maneuver more throughout the underwater lair somehow too.

    Excellent work, and gah...I just hope that Grif will be able to get something he wants at some point and find some comfort too, even if it might be a long ways off yet in the story still. This is definitely quite an emotional read on so many different levels—awesome job! ❤️

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    1. RiaTheDreamer on Chapter 16 Mon 19 Feb 2018 09:39PM UTC

      I am being so cruel to Grif in this fic... Who knows how it will all end?
      I really wished s15 had dived even more into the whole issue of Grif being a Biff for Temple, which is what I am trying to portay in this fic. Temple is messed up, but deep inside he's longing for a twisted sort of comfort.

      I am so glad I could surprise you with the helmet reveal! Now Grif has some possibilities to use!

      Thank you for the support!

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