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  1. BriEva on Chapter 2 Tue 18 Aug 2020 11:46PM UTC

    By POV I mean the writing narrative.
    This is written in a Third Person and/or Omniscient POV. Most likely Omniscent as it switches into other characters thoughts and actions throughout the chapter without breaks or markers.

    Examples: "Nezu glanced at Midoriya, who was looking at him out of the corner of his eye, before replying,"
    "Midoriya gave a dry, humourless laugh, "I have two pinky toe joints."

    He was taken aback. He wasn't expecting Midoriya to actually say something like that. The quirkless had always been discriminated against, and the suicide rate for the quirkless population was increasing. No wonder he was so angry and upset.

    Nezu was glad this boy hadn't decided to try take his life yet."

    In this section we switch between Nedzu and Midoriya rather fluidly the only issue with this is that Nedzu doesn't know WHO Midoriya is at this point. So he should be thinking of Midoriya with his Vigilante name instead.

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    1. Account Deleted on Chapter 2 Wed 19 Aug 2020 02:46PM UTC

      You're stunned.

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      1. BriEva on Chapter 2 Wed 19 Aug 2020 03:51PM UTC

        😑
        No, just giving a little critique.

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        1. Account Deleted on Chapter 2 Wed 19 Aug 2020 09:54PM UTC

          Damn. Just Joshin.

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          1. BriEva on Chapter 2 Wed 19 Aug 2020 10:20PM UTC

            Sorry i take things too litteral sometimes

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            1. Account Deleted on Chapter 2 Thu 20 Aug 2020 04:49PM UTC

              Lmao, don't we all?

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