Thank you!!! I tried to make his realization as realistic as possible. Obviously for us, it's very easy to connect the dots, because we already know the answers, and even if we didn't have the answers it would feel obvious, like, Aaron Davis = The Prowler; The Prowler is still operating in this dimension, this Prowler must be Aaron Davis, etc. But we have more distance than Miles G does. He's not really used to thinking of his Uncle as a villain, and of course he's got the mental block of "well my uncle would never hurt me," which makes it hard to imagine the Prowler hunting him down, and beyond that he's just stressed and tired and dealing with other stuff. So it all slips past him, and is more of a slow realization, like you said. All that to say, I'm glad you liked it :)
I'm also glad you liked the dialogue, I worked hard on that! I really wanted the story to feel like you were watching an alternate version of the movie, so I tried to form the dialogue in a way where I could "hear" his voice saying it in my head. I find that that's usually the point where the dialogue feels most real. I didn't always nail it, but overall I'm pretty happy with it :)
Anyway, thank you for the comment, glad you're continuing to enjoy the story :)
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