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  1. Navanastra on Chapter 15 Wed 04 Jun 2025 10:22AM UTC

    It took you FIVE god damn chapter to spend on one fight scene. Going from high to low, high to low, high to low, and back to high tension again. At some point I was just hoping for the MC to just take his little adopted sister and book it, to finally end this scene and break the tension. But nope, it just went back to 11. This is exhausting and I have no idea what compelled you, dear writer, to drag this out so much. Thats not even mentioning all of the all of the filler and flashbacks at the start of ever chapter which just waste time.

    In my opinion this whole fight is just poorly paced and a rollercoaster of ups and downs. Just exhausting to read through. The fight should have ended at like two or maybe even three chapters MAX, and get resolved.

    Last Edited Wed 04 Jun 2025 10:22AM UTC

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    1. Somni (SilentInsomniac) on Chapter 15 Wed 04 Jun 2025 03:42PM UTC

      At the time, I just wanted to show off Joshua's element.

      Specifically, its power ceiling.

      While I was planning the content for the next several chapters, I foresaw that I wouldn't have another chance to do that again especially once the characters deduce its exact mechanics. So I thought, may as well just get it over with.

      And I was right. It's been over 40 chapters since I wrote the second story arc and a similar scene has not been written again as the major characters all remember what happened.

      Just to be clear -- I didn't treat other fights the same way. All of 'em ended within 3 chapters.

      Last Edited Wed 04 Jun 2025 03:43PM UTC

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      1. Navanastra on Chapter 15 Wed 04 Jun 2025 07:23PM UTC

        Its cool that you took your time to reply to ol' grumpy me.

        Really everyone can just write how ever they want. Its their strories and everyone has their own unique writing style. Its like a siginture.

        I just like to ramble sometimes whenever I find something that erks me.

        Last Edited Wed 04 Jun 2025 07:24PM UTC

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        1. Somni (SilentInsomniac) on Chapter 15 Thu 05 Jun 2025 04:09AM UTC

          I take time to reply to every comment I receive. Chapters uploaded to FFN tend to be 2K - 3K words longer because of all the replies to reviews, and those are usually truncated summaries of whatever was sent in via DM. :D

          It's true that everyone can write however they want, but you DID make a good point.

          Looking back at it... I think I could've done better by putting in less details... telling more and showing less, just to get things moving along. Maybe use a gatekeeper's POV? Using a character that's directly involved in the mess means adding their thoughts and feelings into the prose, at least for my writing style. Other than that, I don't think I'd do it any differently. Not when my purpose for the second story arc is showing off Joshua's element.

          Besides, the city responding to Joshua like an angry hornet's nest paves the way for his starting point in living in this world. :P

          Last Edited Thu 05 Jun 2025 04:09AM UTC

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          1. Navanastra on Chapter 15 Thu 05 Jun 2025 05:31AM UTC

            Well just keep at it I guess.

            Its fics like yours that keep me from updating my silly little stories on a consitant basis...and the fact that I suffer from procrastination-nites

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