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  1. FoxInBox_aka_FIB Sat 18 Feb 2017 06:19AM UTC

    This was very cute! Your characterization of Satoru and his mother was incredible, and the conversation flowed in a very believable and steady way. The only bit of constructive criticism I might have for this piece, if you don't mind hearing it, is that when you say "the kid" it feels like it breaks the easy flow of the story. It feels a little too harsh and uncaring for these characters who are anything but. Anyways, this is a lovely piece! Thank you very much for writing and sharing it!

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    1. PerfectlySteadfast Sun 19 Feb 2017 01:36AM UTC

      Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. :)

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