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The first part of a series of drawings that will detail on how i would write the infamous Hill Have Five episode. because i hate the episode (despite the fact that i love evil Jinmay). After being captured by a bunch of interstelar criminals kwown as The Savage Five, Jinmay gets reprogrammed into becoming a huge threat to not only shuggazoom City but to the criminals themselves aswell. Or in other words, evil Jinmay becomes the main villain of the episode.

Here's the first part of the rewrite: Intro.It would on how normally start the other episode with Jinmay carrying a bag of hover burgers calling them delicious, instead of Nova her company is Antauri, in which he is suprised by the fact that she can call Hover Burger delicious, explaining that while he can eat, he can't no longer taste anything Jinmay was about to say something when Then They both detect the dangers of those evil bikers and when they come, they get beaten with ease by the duo, they also try to call for help just in case but the signal is being jammed.However mighty Klaw ( the cyborg dude) in a last attempt to fight back uses a E.M.P Grenade which was VERY effective against the only 2 members of the monkey team that are entirely robotic, which allowed them to be beaten and be taken to their base while they were temporarily desactivated. 

And like in the episode, one Biker gets left behind. It will be pigface instead of squatch.

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The reprogramming

This scene starts with the gang doing what they did originally, presuming of the things they just stole.
When Jinmay and Antauri wake up from the E.M.P induced shutdown in a containment field, they are too weak to even get up, Jinmay gets very scared and angry about how they could have been defeated by a bunch of idiotic criminals and the so called E.M.P.
Antauri responds that is a weakness of a robotic body, certain weakness organics don't really have. Jinmay then admits that she's scared, but antauri calms her down by saying that he's going to contact Chiro through the power primate and that he will come.

Because pigface was the one left behind, squatch prevents the big green dude from even obtaining any sort of interest in her, so when they come for them, squatch tries to convince them to just deactivate them and leave them for scrap, but the cyborg dude comes and says that he has a better plan for them, and they all give each other evilly looks.

He takes Jinmay out of the containment field, to which Antauri asks what he's going to do with her. His response? -Her will, will no longer be her own haha, she will be a nice addition to our gang! And perhaps you too will get to join the fun!- To which Antauri's face obtains an expression of  understanding and absolute cold terror before being left alone, to which he really tries to comunicate with Chiro. 

The Interrogation.

 As normal, the monkey team comes to where Antauri and Jinmay were attacked, Chiro and the monkeys search for clues until they find Pigphase,  they quickly bring him to the super robot for interrogation, while talkative he never reveals where is the location of his “friends” in fear that they might find and hurt him and his lil monsters.

  Chiro was desperate at first, so he ask angrily where they are, the pig scared says that he can’t tell or they will hurt his little ones, Chiro understanding once he realizes that the pig person is not so bad and that he’s just in a bad situation, decides to try and ask kindly if he can say where they are, promising that they will save them.
   However, before he can even begin, he recieves a power primate Comunication from Antauri but his fears prevents Chiro from sensing his location, but came with a clean message “Jinmay... Danger” before being cut off, Chiro gets scared... VERY Scared.
   Sparx tries to comfort chiro, that if Jinmay is in danger it means that there’s still time and they must hurry.

Not understanding that the message was not that jinmay was in danger, but that she was the danger.

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The takeover

Mighty Claw comes out of the building with evil Jinmay, after reprogramming her, all the other members of the gang are impressed by her new looks, especially Outrageous which angers squash causing him to ask for a demonstration of her worth as a member of the gang just to placate her. They decide that Antauri would make a fine opponent. They open the prison, and antauri tries to escape at first, but Jinmay damages his rocket pack with her heart laser, forcing Antauri to fight her. He tries making her to enter reason, she responds that she will not return to being that weakling and that she’s having so much fun. During the fight, the gang watches with interest and throw them objects such as tubes and weapons to spice up the fight and Outrageous keeps making comments and even a wolf whistles about his interest in the robot girl, which progressively angers squash, however before she can explode, Jinmay suddenly gets beaten by Antauri that has not yet recovered from the E.M.P.

But it was a trick as Jinmay faked her defeat, and was actually waiting for a perfect moment to put her plan into action. Outrageous gets specially angry on how that monkey dared hurt what was his, He started handling a weak Antauri, which is what cemented his destiny, as Jinmay grabs a laser weapon from the ground, and shoots Outrageous while he and everyone else were distracted, knocking him out, to the immense surprise of the gang, she walks over him and says: Care for a new leader..?

This is to fix my second major problem with the episode, i can forgive the gang beating Nova and Jinmay, hell I can forgive the sick pseudo romance of the big green dude and... actually no, i don’t. however what i can’t certainly forgive is the fact that Evil Jinmay wasn’t that big of a threat, merely being an underling. I would have been so much better if she became the Main threat of the episode or atleast a bigger one, just like it happens everytime someone from the hyperfoce becomes evil or gets possessed. 

The Evil Plan

Jinmay, stands over the unconscious body of Outrageous, and convinces each member of the Gang to join her, first with Squash as she wants to fight her asking:" How dare you hurt my Man like that!" Jinmay in a mocking tone responds: "That bad girls like you should do more to keep control over their bad boys, after all, he should be more thankful of having a woman like you by his side..."

Squash was about to argue until she remembers the earlier acts of Outrageous in the fight, gains an evil smile and says: "you know..? I think we are gonna get along just fine, I think it was time my darling learned this lesson anyway."

Jinmay nods then explains her plans as the new leader of the savage Five, she says that they are known in many quadrands of the galaxy as one of the most savage forces of destruction, but she knows what will make everyone truly fear them, to do what Skeleton King, Mandarin and many other evils in the galaxy failed to do, TO TAKE OVER SHUGGAZOOM CITY! 
She then opens her chest heart plate, and brings out her hyperforce communicator, and explains that she shall use that  as bait to bring the rest of the hyperfoce and defeat them. Every member celebrates and agrees with her new plan.

Antauri very weakened over the fight, try to do a last plea for Jinmay to listen to reason, to fight it and gain back control over herself, Jinmay responds that she loves the way she is now, and that he better be quiet or she will assure that Mighty claw do to him what he did to her. 

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The seeking

Now that all was said, planned and done, Pigphase with a new bike guides the monkey team to their camp, their plan being let Pigphase be a mole in the gang, locate aAntauri and jinmay, so they can assess the situation and then surprise attack them, as planned by Otto.

However halfway through, chiro receives a communication from jinmay asking for help.With her locator active, they pinpoint her location, and is nowhere near the direction of the camp, Chiro asks Jinmay where’s Antauri, but the communicator suddenly gets cutoff. The boy not wanting the gang to go unpunished, ask the pig man if the can go without them and stay with them and they will later find him after rescuing Jinmay and Antauri.

Evil Jinmay is of course trying to trick the monkey team to come to the giant mount sarlacc pit like monster.

Every Queen needs a King

The monkey team goes to the location of Jinmay's communicator right inside a "sarlacc pit" Mouth ground creature, the monkeys and chiro worried comes closer to the pit trying to create a plan to enter into the creature and get them out of there... however it was an ambush, they were attacked by the wild five, taking nova's backpack, that surprise them long enough for the creature tentacles to grab all the members of the monkey team.

Jinmay decides that she wanted Chiro, so Mighty claw gives to her an electric whip which she uses to get chiro out of the creature’s tentacles snaring and electrifying him. Then she brings him to her declaring that he is hers...Chiro tries to ask why she's doing this, what have they done to her, and tries to affirm that she did not really want to do this. She responds cackling that after all every queen needs a king, and that she would not be the exception.

Jinmay and the gang goes away with Chiro and the monkeys get devoured by the creature.

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Not your damsel in distress

The gang decides return to the base, but jinmay decides to take the longer way with chiro, while the rest take the short way, during that period Pigphase also returns to the base, interrupting a sad and stupid discussion between Outrageous and squash.

She then looks at him with suspicion. she starts asking him question, like how did he escape and if they followed him and stuff, he lies with ease...

Meanwhile Chiro ask what jinmay wants, she then starts to do a 30-60 second villain song, in which I lack the imagination to actually write the lyrics, but it’s about how much she hated being the damsel in distress and that now she will be the one to bring everyone else to distress. That she will rule! And finally prove she is truly strong.

It should be a pretty fast paced upbeat song and it should be called "Not your damsel in distress".

Join me or he will suffer

Jinmay and chiro finally arrives at the camp and then she frees him from his bonds to give him the ultimatum of joining her or else. Chiro of course says not to ever joining the Savage Five, that he wants her sweet jJnmay back. Jinmay smugly opens her chest chamber and takes out a remote control and presses its button....

Antauri screams in pain as the shock collars electrifies his robotic body, and then gets silent trying to hold it at best as he can once he notices Chiro has arrived.

Chiro ask her to stop! and Jinmay responds. “No... Join me... my sweetheart” Chiro knowing that he is without option he surrenders...

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The Regurgitation

We return to our dear Sarlacc monster, pacific, trying to digest her most recent prey until... PAIN!, it was not an sapient creature but if it could think it would along the lines of: WHAT IS THIS PAIN, WHAT DID I EAT!? AUUUUUGH!! MY STOMACH! I'M GONNA DIE..UGGGHHH!. Suddenly Monkey attacks starts coming out of her mouth, She could not take it anymore and so regurgitates the monkey team then closes her mouth and she put herself in a state that can be define "dormant" (but it is still alive).

The monkey team now out express their disgust as they are now covered in monster saliva and slime, but that at least it was not worse than the dark one worm, that one was disgusting. Nova is the one who complains the most as her jetpack is now broken and ask why would Jinmay do that! Otto responds that she is probably being controlled by a "neural-mecha controller" as he saw that thing that was inserted into her head before being vored by the creature and that they just need to take it out and she will be back to normal!

Nova asks how he knows about that but Gibson interrupts by saying: "Because he's Otto" and then brings up his scanner and explains that Chiro's tracker is now deactivated, but the one on Pigphase is still active and they now have the pinpoint location of the Savage Five Base.

The deal

Now we return to our big friend, Pigphase, now on guard duty. Outrageous tries getting his attention, and so he did, in annoyance the pig man ask what he wants. The ex-leader responds that beyond being free from this place and getting back control over my group! see him succeed! Pigphase angrily respond that is a lie! he bullies him, berates him that he more than others treated him like dirt! The ogre respond that It was to build his character, getting rid of that all that softie weaknesses.

Pigphase gets right in front of the "bars" and Outrageous says that he knows how soft he really is inside and that he's been protecting him ever since joining the gang, reveals that he was the "only one" preventing everyone from taking his little ones for a "buffet" but that now that he's behind bars sort of speak he can't do that anymore.

He says that he promises that he will protect his animals! he only needs to break the containment field and free him but only at the right moment, that he should wait for his signal, Pigphase became conflicted because for one side, he doesn't exactly Trust Outrageous, but from the other side he believes that the monkey team has been defeated and can't help him save his animals.

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The presentation

Jinmay gets out from a house very happily, tries calling Chiro to get out as well but he refuses, she extends her arm and pushed him into the front, the gang starts clapping and compliments his new looks, even with squash that out right says that for someone that's nothing more but a trophy husband that belongs to dearest Jinmay, he looks adorable!

And all Chiro could only say about that: I know you're evil now and stuff... But I Can't Believe you forced me wear these clothes...

Hoodie now starts a barbecue to celebrate and demands Pigphase to bring ones of his animals to the cooked, which makes him even more nervous considering the conversation he just had with Outrageous...

The Prisoner

Hoodie insists on cooking one of Pigphase's animals, he says no it repeats until hoodie starts insulting him calling him fat full of grease, that maybe they should eat him, to which he finally cracks, and so they both start a fight, Mighty claw and Squash starts acting like that particular kind of people that when they see people fight they starts not only cheering them up, but actually putting words in the pig man and the scarecrow mouths to stir up the fight!

Jinmay watches with a petrified look and ask to herself- “Is this... actually the team that I was made to be the leader of?” then she face palms and goes to end the fight herself- “idiots...”

During that distraction, Chiro goes to Antauri's prison to check on him, he ask if he is okays to which Antauri respond that he's been better but that he will be fine, Chiro ask what happened to his powers, why he isn't out yet, Antauri reveals that trying to use his powers or trying to remove the collar will electrify him.

Chiro says that then they must use the remote control to take it off, but since Jinmay have it inside her chest, he fears that he might need to take drastic measures to obtain it, Antauri assures chiro that whatever he needs to do, jinmay will forgive him that he would if he was in her shoes.

The Betrayal

Hoodie starts apologizing to Jinmay, admitting that Pigphase has never fought back before, Jinmay respond that no more of that, they are a team and will not accept such behavior.

However then Jinmay ask the pig man to get some food right now! However he get the misconception that she meant that he gets one his animals to be eaten, which was not what she intended at all, she just wanted him to find anything to eat.

This proves to be a fatal blunder as Pigphase then punches a hole into the prison, breaking the containment field which unleash Outrageous and also the animals inside of it. Cue Reactions...

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The Daring Escape

The first act of freedom Outrageous does is to throw the angry animals to the rest of the savage five (barring Chiro as he is still besides Antauri's prison). One weird bug with tentacles tries chocking Mighty claw, while a crab creature grabs Squash head, Jinmay however successfully fight one of these animals, but before she can do anything else Outrageous throws her Pigphase, quite crushing her in the process with an audible "ouch".

Thanks to all this distraction, outrageous steals one of the bikes (in this particular case, hoodie's bike) to his disgrace, he screams at outrageous and tries chasing him, but then considers that the green ex leader is in a bike and he isn’t, so he stops.

Jinmay then lifts Pigphase over her head with red eyes blazing full of angry, promises of pain and death. She says "Get off me you SACK OF BACON!" Before throwing him into one of the makeshift buildings.

The Charm

Jinmay was furious, the pig has done it and so he must pay! she walked slowly towards him, with eyes blazing red, about to destroy pigphase with her flaming lasers, however just before she could, chiro came from behind her and touched her shoulder. "what!?" she asked.

Chiro tried every romantic complement that a 14 teenage boy with extreme anxiety could think of, as you may understand this caused some of his compliments to be really weird, like how the green in her eyes were beautiful as toxic goo among other things, or how her pink hair was ravishing as a blue flower, that a lady like her should not be trouble by pigs like that guy.

Jinmay found this funny and assumed that he was being this pushy because he didn't want her to eliminate the pig, so she then said "I know what are you doing Chiro" he got very scared, then she pointed at that pig man. "but fine, I will let him live, just be like this for a lot longer okay, is amusing…” Chiro sweaty gave her a smile with a nod breathing with relief. then when he was really close to her, his arm around her, no changing his expression, he said: “I'm sorry. “

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The heartbreak

Chiro reluctantly charges a thunder punch, jinmay gets surprised, sees chiro in complete unbelief, Chiro hits her chest, and rips open her heart chest chamber Door and gets  Antauri's collar's remote control and then break its, freeing antauri.

Jinmay in anger screams, on how dare Chiro hit her!, how he dared to that, that he just broke her heart and so she says with finality that the relationship between them is over (visibly Chiro doesn't take that last part so seriously), then she screams that she will now utterly destroy him. The rest of the gang were, were woo ho, show him!

Versus Jinmay

Jinmay then proceeds to attack Chiro, Chiro defends himself, until Jinmay tries to do an upper kick to which Chiro blocks and grabs her foot, and tries to get Jinmay into reason, however Jinmay activates that foot's rocket booster which blast chiro away, berating him for trying to "save" her.

Antauri suddenly attacks from behind, but jinmay quickly dodges, knowing that he would just do that, the momentum of the attack causes Antauri to do a back flip just as Jinmay launches a rocket at him.

Meanwhile the rest of the savage five (barring the pig) are cheering her on, watching from the sidelines.

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The rocket explodes which blows Antauri away, when he lands, he seemingly tries to get Jinmay to awake to not avail, that the thing in her head was controlling her. However it actually was merely Antauri telling Chiro about what was the thing over her head and what it does

Jinmay of course responds that she is in control, and then chargers her laser eyes to destroy Antauri but Chiro gets behind her, grabs her by the neck and tries getting the controller out of her head, alas to not avail, as in this alternate universe, you can't just make the thing come off.

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Her rant

Chiro tried getting the controller off her head, but it did not budge, Jinmay hit him with her elbow which made him release her, then Jinmay picks him up and throws him at Antauri.

Jinmay then starts ranting about how she wanted to be his perfect girlfriend, to fight alongside him, to stop being a damsel in distress, to never need to be rescued again, to be worthy of him, but he continuously rejected her, that he didn't understand that everything she did was for him, that she even gave up her search for her past to stay in shuggazoom city alongside him and her team. Chiro was actually stupefied by this as some of those things she said as he didn't know which was true and what was false.

However, before she could attack them again, she gets interrupted by Nova when she Screams "Not so fast Jinmay!" To which Sparx adds in a joking tone of voice "Relationship problems Jinmay?" The monkey team has arrived!

Next is a comic on how the rant could go about. It reads from right to left like a manga.

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The Savage Fight

At the surprise of the monkeys, jinmay commands her gang to FIGHT!

Nova goes against mighty claw, starting with an uppercut. Squash tries dealing with Gibson And Sparx Alone, and hoodie blocks one of ottos attack with a SPATULA!

The pig is nowhere to be seen. Meanwhile Jinmay finally gaze upon Chiro and Antauri, ready for their final fight.

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The Wild Plan

The fight between the wild five and the monkey team goes on, Mighty claw successfully evading and somehow blocking Novas punches, Hoodie demonstrates his agility by evading and blocking many of Otto's attacks with his SPATULA, until the monkey sees and opening and cuts down the tool in two, which surprises and angers the scarecrow guy as that was personally his favorite spatula.

Squash grabs Sparx's tail and hits Gibson with the red monkey, Among the battle cries, distant explosions (products of Jinmay missiles that are flying all over the place and also her lasers) among other things, we see Pigphase hiding behind one of the structures, he is seen very scared, but then cautiously watches one of Jinmay's missiles almost hurt one of his animals, and decides there and now that this has to stop.

The pig man with a determined look in his face sneak into a building to get something to help.

Versus Jinmay 4

After a while, Jinmay lands on the ground and attacks Chiro with her eye beams, to which teh hero promptly dodges, he then screams "Jinmay please!" Trying to get into her, however Jinmay only responds with an evil smirk, however that distraction was enough for Antauri to push her into the Jinmay, trying to get the Controller of her head with his ghost claws, he almost succeeds but Jinmay quickly recovers her senses and punches Antauri screaming "Get off from me!" then on an angry expression she says: "I won't let you turn me back into that weakling!"

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The upcoming defeat

The monkey team starts beating the Biker Gang, first sparx and Gibson after recovering from being beaten down by each other at the hands of squash, they see that they are close to the makeshift metal walls that they wild five made around their base, Sparx and gibson share a knowing looks, so gibson using his drills fires a laser that breaks one of the panels, and sparx using his magnets guide it to fall on top of squash knocking her out.

Nova just Uppercut Mighty claw and he falls unconscious, and otto, using his saw tears the bag that Hoodie had on his face, upong seing his face otto can't help but exclaim, that his face is the second ugliest thing he have ever seen. This confuses and angers the scarecrown long enough for him to blindly attack Otto, giving him the opportunity to respond with a kick and push him into some of the pig's animals which takes cares of the last gang member.

Among all this chaos Pigphase is running dodging debris and flame, running towards Jinmay, having in both of his hands E.M.P grenades, the same kind of ones that knocked Jinmay and Antauri at the beginning of this whole ordeal. The robot girl hearing the commotion, looks behind her looking at her defeated team, and also more importantly sees the pigman running towards her with the grenades... She did not like that.

The beat down

Jinmay prepares her hand to launch a rocket at Pigphase, however Chiro quickly Jumps and pushes Jinmay to the ground, causing the rocket to go at a slightly inclined angle, this causes the rocket to not hit the Pig man directly but rather hit the ground ahead of Pigphase, the splash of the explosion pushes him back makes him launch the grenade without activating it and lands close to a very battered Antauri. Jinmay and Chiro skirmish on the ground until she obtains the upper hand and gets on top of Chiro and proceeds to hit him in his face repeatedly with her fists.

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The Uncontrollation

The monkey team now with the rest of the gang defeated rapidly goes to Jinmay, she sees that and stands up bringing chiro to her with a choke hold basically putting him into the classic hostage situation. Do anything or he dies as a last act of desperation. The monkey team gets frozen on their steps as a wrong move could bring Jinmay to kill chiro (he can't also fight as he is very tired and weak as the beat down Jinmay gave him left him somewhat stunned or dizzy).

However behind her, Antauri using the last bit of energy and strength he had left in his body (after all he never got charged, repaired from the damages done by the first E.M.P grenade, the shocks made from the collar and the overall tiredness thanks to the many fights) activates the grenade and throws it to Jinmay before shutting down, it lands closer to her feet, Jinmay gets surprised, drops Chiro and can only say in a expression of terror a calm "OH noooo..." before everything becomes PAIN, white and then black. The E.M.P grenade also fried the controller ending the Evil Biker Jinmay persona for good.

AfterMatch

Some minutes have passed, Jinmay activates again after her internal self-repair mechanism allows a modicum of mobility, when she wakes, she does in chiro's arms, she was confused at first, however the memories came back, and the only thing she could say was string after string of apologies, that she didn't mean to to that, Chiro respond by hugging her and assures her that he doesn't blame her at all, she cries harder.

Meanwhile we see otto quick repairing Antauri, giving some of his energy reactivates Antauri, the battle is over, everything is calm, but there's now how to deal with the now captured Wild Five members.

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Forgiveness

Jinmay still sad comes to Antauri to say sorry for what she did to him, however the robot monkey assures her that there is no problem, that he forgives her. Jinmay thanks to a final assurance from Chiro, that everything is okay, she finally does a small smile.

The pig guy is left free with his animals, he may or may not start an intergalactic animal caretaker center in the future. After all is in a way thanks to him that Biker Jinmay could get defeated. Then we get to the Wild Five, the scarecrow guy, hoodie, tells Jinmay, that despite his short rule, she was a far better leader than Outrageous.

The wild five gang will spend a great amount of time behind bars, there's a nice place reserved for them thanks to all the criminal destruction they have brought to many planets in the universe... However, thanks to what Hoodie just said, the entire monkey team gets in shock, Chiro saying: "I forgot completely about him... where is he?..."

The end

We see outrageous, resting after escaping on a random direction, raging about what happened to him, making an interesting echo to a certain sixth monkey, he promises that he will be back and that he will make that piece of scrap of a robot girl pay, ah yes, he will do it, he will explore, twist and rip out every sweet circuit that is inside her head... S L O W L Y... Regardless of how wild she was. And so will do the same to that cyborg Mighty Claw that made her like that!

However, before he could go anymore with his self-promises to bring pain to those that made him suffer, a tentacle comes out of nowhere and grabs him, He is scared, he tries to fight, to break from them, but they rapidly bring him into a giant mouth located in the ground, it was the old dear Sarlacc pit monster. If she could think in a sapient way of manner she would think “Look at his prey, so big, finally, something that will kept me fed for the next century” However it was not a sapient creature, and the only thing that she did was burp in contentment after eating the Wild Five Ex leader. The only thing remaining was his hat...

Now this was done because an actual personal hate over a character, he probably could have done some other antagonistic stuff rather than just running away, like helping chiro only to betray him later or something along those lines, but we all know the kind of person he is, so this is his fate.