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1. God_of_ok👍👌 (Guest) on Chapter 1 Thu 05 Jun 2025 09:52PM UTC

   Ok, seems like a cool concept.👌👍

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2. Charlecavalo on Chapter 1 Fri 06 Jun 2025 02:14AM UTC

   

   Stand Name: Pleiades
   User Name: Natsuki Subaru
   Type: Evolutionary Combat Stand

   [Stats]

   Power: C (physical strength of a human in top condition, but still human)

   Speed: C (agile, but far from superhuman)

   Durability: C (can withstand some heavy blows, but not critical damage)

   Range: B (a little over 15 meters)

   Precision: A (very high precision)

   Development Potential: A (infinite evolution)

    

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   [Special Abilities]

   (Act 1)

   Negation: An ability that rewinds the user and the Stand 4 seconds into the past.

   Remorse: An automatic ability that sends the user back to a specific point in time every time they die.

    

   (Act 2)

   Procrastination: An ability that stops time for 5 seconds, allowing the user and the Stand to move freely. It can be extended depending on the target’s resistance to the timewave effect.

   Karma: An ability that delays the effect of a wound, sending it to the future. The damage will be suffered later, and it is impossible to avoid it forever.

    

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   Pleiades has a total of 7 Acts, each one changing or upgrading its abilities, similar to Luffy’s Gears. However, only the first two Acts have been revealed so far.

   Moreover, since Subaru has never used his Stand for selfish reasons, he hasn’t developed truly powerful or versatile abilities. Because of that, he only has access to Act 1—until the problems in the other world force him to evolve his Stand.

    

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   Let me know if you'd like help developing the story or the next Acts! There's a lot of potential here.

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3. 1. DeviousApple on Chapter 1 Fri 06 Jun 2025 02:59AM UTC

      

      Cool concept dude, so his stand would work like tusk? Maybe have it so each act evolves after he gains another authority?? And what do you think it should look like?

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   2. 1. Charlecavalo on Chapter 1 Fri 06 Jun 2025 03:55AM UTC

         

         Yes, it would be kind of like Tusk, his Stand. Each "act" would have an evolution in its form and gain a new ability. As for the acts, I think he would unlock them in moments of extreme stress and desperation, where he pushes the Stand to its limit.
         For example: in that scene where Envy is about to kill Emilia because he broke the taboo, he forces himself to move even with time frozen, unlocking Act 2 and its two abilities, since Procrastination allows him to move in frozen time.

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      2. 1. EhmedeXan on Chapter 1 Fri 06 Jun 2025 04:55AM UTC

            

            Subaru Moriohta yaşasaydı ve Kira olaylarına katılsaydı? Hadi, ona bi arka plan hikayesi ver. Lugnika'ya halihazırda güçlüyken gitmesini istiyorum. Unutmayın Stand kullanıcıları stand kullanıcılarını çeker. Aslında neden Subaru'yu bir JoJo yapmıyoruz? Higashikata Subaru? bilmiyorum, gerçektende çok fazla potansiyel var.

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         2. 1. Charlecavalo on Chapter 1 Fri 06 Jun 2025 05:15PM UTC

               

               I don’t know why, but I just can’t imagine Subaru being a charismatic hero in his world if he had a Stand. He would definitely use it for his own benefit — at least while he thought he was the only one with such a power — kind of like Yuu Otosaka from Charlotte.
               If I were to write that kind of story, I think I’d do it like this:

                

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               Things couldn’t be better for Natsuki Subaru.

               There was a time when he thought he was doomed to failure, and that nothing he did could save him from his own uselessness or pull him out from under his father’s overwhelming shadow.
               But it seemed fate had finally decided to smile on him.

               > "Good morning, Natsuki-san! Having a nice day?"

                

               > "Subaru, bro! Don’t forget we’ve got team practice later."

                

               > "N-Natsuki-kun, my friends and I are going to karaoke later… if you want to come with us..."

                

               Yeah, his life was riding a wave of good luck.

               Some might wonder how someone like him went from being the guy who embarrassed himself on the first day of school to one of the most popular students.
               Well, it all came down to one very curious fact — something no one would ever believe if he told them.

               > "Kyaaaa!"
               A girl walking by with her arms full of books and papers tripped, heading face-first toward the ground.

                

               Or at least, she almost did.
               She stopped inches from hitting the floor, her body flung backward in a motion that was anything but natural — as if someone had hit rewind on an old VHS tape.

               > "Kyaaaa!"
               She tripped again, but before she could realize it, she was caught in the arms of a boy in a spotless yet casual uniform, with dark hair and brown eyes that were both mischievous and hypnotic.

                

               > "Hey, be careful. The floor’s been super slippery lately. You’re not hurt, are you?" Subaru said with a kind smile.

                

               > "N-no, I’m fine... Thank you so much, N-Natsuki-san," she replied, blushing as she picked up the books that had fallen.

                

               > "No problem, Hinata-chan. Actually, want me to help you carry these to class? They look kinda heavy," Subaru said as he helped her gather the books.

                

               > "Y-yes! I mean... that would be a big help. Thank you, Natsuki-san!"
               ‘Kyaaah! Natsuki-san remembers my name! I can’t believe it!’

                

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               A short little scene: Subaru was using his Stand to live a “perfect life” — being the popular guy at school who does everything right on the first try, subtly manipulating everyone around him (not in an evil or extreme way, just enough to make them like him), and getting perfect grades.

               Until... other Stand users start hunting him down, noticing the strange temporal manipulation — and what starts is a chase and battle between Subaru and the other users.
               Then, at the climax of the conflict, in the middle of the night…

               He gets summoned to Lugunica.

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            2. 1. EhmedeXan on Chapter 1 Fri 06 Jun 2025 07:35PM UTC

                  

                  If you plan on writing, please do not follow this plot. Remember, Subaru has had a Stand since birth. He has a completely different background than the original Subaru. Remember Kakyoin's last thoughts? Apply this to Subaru.

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               2. EhmedeXan on Chapter 1 Fri 06 Jun 2025 07:36PM UTC

                  

                  Yani demek istediğim "Okulun ilk günü kendini utandıran adam" orijinal Subaru için geçerli.

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4. Charlecavalo on Chapter 2 Fri 06 Jun 2025 04:42PM UTC

   

   I usually write on my laptop using the Obsidian app, but it also has a mobile version. On my phone, I mostly jot down scenes to develop later. Writing on Archive isn’t bad, but with Obsidian, you can count words and do other useful stuff.

   Another tip is to divide your chapters into parts. Like, list the things you want to happen in it — for example: 1) Subaru getting summoned, 2) meeting Emilia, 3) fighting Elsa — and then just start filling in those sections.

   If you’re having trouble with spelling or writing enough words and dialogue, just drop your draft into ChatGPT and ask it to fix the spelling and expand the scene to make it longer and smoother.

   What I recommend most is writing chapters with at least 2,300 words. Really short chapters rarely manage to hold the reader’s interest.

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5. 1. EhmedeXan on Chapter 2 Fri 06 Jun 2025 07:24PM UTC

      

      It's going to be a bit lazy, but I'll take the dialogues from WN and modify them a bit. Otherwise, what I write probably won't be understood due to cultural differences.

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