Actions

Work Header

Pls come and criticize my Writing skills (constructively)

Summary:

Oh no smth bad happen at rblx hq

Notes:

This is a test fic, constructive criticism is encouraged.
PS. Chio is a shortened version of Pistachio.

(See the end of the work for more notes.)

Work Text:

it was a relatively normal day in Robloxia (if you ignore the fact that three of the most important admins were missing)
and Pistachio thought the weather was perfect for a picnic with her child
but first she needed to finish her research paper for her j*b and she was just about to complete it when her Gui started ringing

*ring ring, ring ring, ring ri-*

Chio: hello?...

Tara: *frantic breathing*

Chio: Tara? are you ok? w-what's wrong?

Tara: p-please help *her breathing quickens*

Chio: Tara I'm gonna need you to calm down ok?
take a deep breath in, deep breath out, in..., out...

*Tara's breathing slows down slightly, although the panic is still there*

Chio: ok, what's happening?

Tara: s-something or someone h-as entered th-the HQ and Its k-ki-killing everyone

KILLING? who would kill everyone in the HQ in the first place?; 1x?
no he's stuck in the Banlands for their crimes; Noli? probably not because if it was him he would have everyone's deaths broadcasted to the entirety of Robloxia, best not to think about it.
Either way she needs to get to the HQ A.S.A.P despite being absolutely terrified.

Chio: stay on the phone Tara, find somewhere safe to hide while I get there ok?

Pistachio grabs a cardigan, a pair of shoes and abandons her room leaving her research on the desk.
While rushing down the stairs she calls for her child "Marzipan! come downstairs please"

"Ok Mum" now everyone in Pistachios life has said that taking care of children was a hard task, she believed them until Marzipan came along and proved them wrong in every way.
For one the child was a behavioural enigma, they wouldn't throw tantrums over ice-cream no, but if you didn't let them go to the library they would scream, other than that Marzipan was an angel

Notes:

This test fic is technically a beta version of the fanfic i actually want to create.
this means that the characters mentioned and stuff that happened in the test fic will most likely be included in the actual Fanfic.
once again, constructive criticism is encouraged and appreciated
Also when commenting pls call me Eunie(pronounced 'YOU-KNEE') -Eunie :3