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  1. Arya12 on Chapter 21 Sun 28 Sep 2025 05:05PM UTC

    Aaw thank you i'm glad you think so. The meeting with Dusk went by pretty fast and in his pov i tried to show that Shiver was stuck in a freeze response. Kind of ironic that Sonics variant has a freeze response, but that's just how his body reacts. There's only so much i could show in that chapter though. Not sure if you picked up on that. It also gave me a chance to show what Shiver was wimpering to himself even if it wasn't loud and cohorent enough for Dusk to hear. I did say before that Dusk has no idea how badly this scared Shiver. I did want to do a pov for both of them for this from the beginning. It took awhile to get to the point where both of them finally meet. So i didn't want it to dissapoint.

    There might be other times i will try and show both of their pov's. With both of them being so different it's interesting to show how they see things around them. Really tried to show that in both of their chapters. Poor Shiver had this internalized war going on in his mind. Dusk actually managed to scare him so badly that Shiver got such a bad panic attack that he passed out. I wanted to add more to the chapter but decided to just focus on Shivers pov for their meeting. I think this fit though.

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    1. FortuneSpirit on Chapter 21 Sun 28 Sep 2025 06:21PM UTC

      It works very well. And yeah, I agree; exploring the same scene from two different perspectives can be very effective, especially when they're so different. Hell, I've written whole oneshots out twice to show different perspectives myself - and got two of those coming real soon too.

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      1. Arya12 on Chapter 21 Sun 28 Sep 2025 06:39PM UTC

        Thank you. I couldn't help but think how different they are from Sonic and Shadow while writing their meeting. A very interesting part to write. Poor Shiver is so stressed right now. Dusk has no idea what he's caused. They are on the same island so let's see what happens next.

        That's very exciting to hear. Looking forward to see what you write. I already said it but Caliburns pov was really good.

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        1. FortuneSpirit on Chapter 21 Sun 28 Sep 2025 07:38PM UTC

          Thank you. Unpleasant Conversations should be up now too!

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          1. Arya12 on Chapter 21 Mon 29 Sep 2025 07:41PM UTC

            That's great. One of your stories i haven't checked. I try to keep up with most but it's a lot of stories and it might be interesting to post Caliburns pov as a one shot. It really is such a great read.

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            1. FortuneSpirit on Chapter 21 Mon 29 Sep 2025 09:13PM UTC

              I might sometime.

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              1. Arya12 on Chapter 21 Thu 02 Oct 2025 05:48PM UTC

                That would be great.

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