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  1. Soon enough reader's gonna be singing to hunter that she’ll "pledge allegiance to your hands, your batch, your vibes" 😉😏 (or is that just me singing that...)

    She helped native communities obtain heirlooms they’d left behind after being forced onto reservations, navigated for immigrant families migrating out west, and even spent some time in Mexico.
    >>> oh I love how you’ve adapted this!

    “Not the whole thing,” Hunter groaned. Phee winked at him mischievously.
    >>> oooooh I am here for the hunter & phee bestie-in-law-but-hunter-will-never-admit-it dynamic

    Hunter tried to hide his blush, but his long, dark hair was tied back so that he had to bury his face in his arms like a tired child.
    >>> I love the tired child metaphor because deep down he needs to rest and be taken care of 🥺

    She launched herself into Hunter’s arms, throwing her arms around his neck. Scarcely had she done so when she turned to Tech to hug his legs just as enthusiastically
    >>> the way she hugs them is so perfect and so in character!!!

    One was skinny with frown lines, while the other had more muscles than the body-builder you’d seen at P.T. Barnum’s and a smile brighter than New York City.
    >>> I adore the way you’ve described Wrecker!

    “Is that all I am to you?” Crosshair feigned hurt with an aghast hand on his chest.
    >>> I kid you not I audibly laughed reading this

    Phee linked her arms with her husband’s and with Crosshair’s
    >>> how the Batch survived before Phee I have no idea. I LOVE her in this

    “Havoc,” Hunter pointed to the palomino, “And Maudie.”
    >>> this is such a clever way to adapt the ship into the fic!! I am in awe of these little hints to canon you’ve seamlessly slipped in!

    “I am not vain!” Hunter was suddenly defensive, but his hand went to his hair as his brothers sniggered.
    >>> OH MY GOSH THE CROSSHAIR AND HUNTER DYNAMIC I CAN’T AND HUNTER WITH HIS HAIR THIS IS SO DELICIOUSLY GORGEOUS nom nom nom

    You wondered what it would be like to run your fingers through it.
    >>> hehehehehehe I sense ATTRACTION and I’m here for it

    Chattering Omega/Megan has my HEART oh she’s so precious

    I just love how much they are all trying to help reader adapt/how mindful Hunter is particularly of her needs. AHHHH the way you’ve written him is the STANDARD for men.

    Tech cleared his throat as the waterfall faded behind you, “In actuality, there was most likely an avalanche, uncovering an underground stream that allowed the waterfall to form. In any case, it provides the drinking water for all of Pabu Creek.”
    >>> oh tech you are so darling

    “Hunter made that one just for you!” Megan said, holding out the chair for you.
    >>> AHHH I’m crying of course he MADE it my man’s so thoughtful like that

    Crosshair huffed, taking the piece of straw he’d been chewing the entire time and tossing it into a far corner of the room.
    >>> nice nice nice I like the straw/toothpick reference

    Well, not everything.
    >>> Phee is the GOAT

    There were far more dangerous criminals acting out, according to Hunter, so why were the marshals concerning themselves with the family of the Sheriff in an inconsequential town?
    >>> oooh I am intrigued!!!

    This chapter was perfection itself! I am completely enraptured by the way you write with so much detail and feeling and how you capture all the different relationship dynamics!

    Last Edited Tue 07 Oct 2025 07:15AM UTC

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      Thank you so much! Full disclosure this chapter was so fun to write I love writing AUs and Hunter refusing to admit he's in love.

      "Your hands, your batch, your vibe," I have to use that as a tagline.

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      1. please do!!!!!

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