Comment on The Legacy Awakened

  1. Vernon wasn't mentioned as getting a wand.
    The conversations feel stilted, jagged, inhuman in a way that I cannot pinpoint.
    The way the sentences are structured makes it feel disingenuous.

    Hopefully that gets cleared up. The premise of this fic is interesting, at the very least.

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    1. Why would Vernon get a wand?
      And which conversation do you mean?
      which sentemces?

      it is only my second story, so im doing my best also im not native english speaking, i dont know if thats why you get the feeling?
      i hope you find your answers as we move forward

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