Comment on You See the Battlefield

  1. Lizzie (Guest) on Chapter 1 Sun 14 Sep 2014 07:54AM UTC

    I love the idea, the concept of BAMF John is always great, and after such an experience, Mycroft and John will be quite closely linked. I just think you'd benefit from a beta reader with regards to grammar, spelling and style. Some of the repitions - like "But the odds were not in John’s favor, eight to one were not good odds " - are a bit awkward, and a good beta reader might help you there. Other than that, the idea is brilliant!

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