Well, this was worrying. (Also, holy carp. Having a friendly eldritch-horror type around is literally the only reason the kids' story didn't end last chapter with 'got brainwashed whoops'.) "'you can enter the High Wilderness and join your kin.'" - "your kin." Oh boy, idk much about Sunless Sea, but I'm guessing that that is not of the good. ...but the ending *snickers*. Sorry, Kid, but your most serious moments are doomed to be ruined by a sudden embarrassing lightening of dramatic tension. (I mean, it makes sense. Kid's clothes are already established to be physical objects that he can't just poof into existence, and his last set went bye-bye so...)
[quibbles: "emotional times like these did make him forget the final details." - *finer details "'You won’t have too,' Kid said and ran straight into the armed crowd," - here it should be *to, not too; also, I'm pretty sure there should be a comma after "said".]
Yup, a benefit of having a friendly-neighbor eldritch deity is that they can shut down any similar entities that act like dicks. (And for some reason, I'm imagining Liz and Patty pointing at Kid and being like 'Sir this is my emotional support eldritch entity' and vice versa with 'Sir these are my emotional support humans' lol) Hehe, I hope the 'kin' line seems even more ominous now that you know what's up with the High Wilderness... Finally, Kid had a first-hand lesson on why one out to be careful when wearing skirt-like garments lol
(Also, early note about the typos: thanks for pointing them out! This story in particular was pretty bad when it came to them cause it was written with looming deadlines and I didn't really have the time or motivation to go back and correct them. However, newer, hopefully typo-free versions should be up soon.)
I'm sorry, I just read that scenario and I can't stop grinning. Liz and Patty /so would/??? And depending on his mood, Kid might just roll with it. XD And yes, yes it is.
(re: typos: It's cool. I mean, you write a /lot/, and your stories are consistently written well - the plots are coherent, the descriptions are On Point, and your characterizations are just beautiful. ...anyway, English is confusing enough as a first language.)
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