Comment on Finding Our Way Home

  1. anon (Guest) on Chapter 1 Sat 02 Mar 2013 08:12AM UTC

    This seems cute, but you might want to consider either getting a beta or spending a bit more time with editing. There are a lot of spelling mistakes (for example lady instead of lad, mu instead of my, goo instead of good) and they seem to multiply closer to the end of the fic. I was also wondering about Bilbo being a fast messenger since neither party trusted him and Lobelia calling Bilbo her brother. Mistakes? And possibly by mathirs you mean mathoms?

    There are also tense sifts in the middle of the story and even in the middle of a sentence, those can really throw a reader.

    Little bit of polishing would make your fic shine much brighter! It has interesting original ideas.

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