"The detective sinks to his knees at John’s feet, buries his face into a slightly softened stomach, and the two of them stand there in total silence".
Well done. I enjoyed the character development & was grateful the obligatory punch was avoided in your narrative.
Just wondered if you might want to change the word " stand" in the above sentence( given that Sherlock is described as being on his knees) to " remain" or some such verb ?
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Celia (Guest) Wed 06 Mar 2013 10:11PM UTC
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