Interesting so far, but I think these things needed more impact. For example, Lady Hogwarts just kinda appeared in a paragraph or two, but for such an important moment it didn't carry much impact. The same is true for the wards. I feel like each stone should have gotten like 4 times the length, maybe with the experience and knowledge or whatever of the founders/previous headmasters pouring into Harry.
Still interesting, but those scenes felt like there should have been more, if that makes sense.
Yeah that makes sense, thank you. When I started writing this I just kind of wanted to get it down, and I hadn't been writing for very long. As for the Headstones, a bit of that is done when he gets the ring in a few chapters. You're right about the Lady Hogwarts thing, I was re-reading it to check something and couldn't even find it because it was so short! I'll probably re-write this at some point, but I'm focused on my Severitus at the moment. Thank you for the comment!
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