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  1. Ashley (Guest) on Chapter 6 Mon 06 Dec 2021 11:48PM UTC

    Btw, if you have a character talking, I recommend not having another do an action right after in the same paragraph, because sometimes writers will put an action next to dialogue to show who's talking, so it could be confusing. Instead, put the action by the different character in a different paragraph

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    1. bitsinboots on Chapter 6 Tue 07 Dec 2021 03:18AM UTC

      Okay but you see how this is a little rude right? Unsolicited critiques on fanfiction isn't really polite. I'm posting this for free and I'm writing this out of enjoyment. There probably are grammar mistakes and typos everywhere but fuck it, this is fanfiction not a published work. If I wanted advice on my writing I would ask for it. Thank you for understanding.

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      1. Ashley (Guest) on Chapter 6 Wed 08 Dec 2021 06:52PM UTC

        Oh, I'm sorry, I didn't think it was rude, I'm fine with most constructive criticism, but I shouldn't have assumed other people would be too. I was just letting you know because I sometimes got confused about who was talking. I'm sorry, I didn't mean to be rude. Your writing is really good btw

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