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  1. Keiko_un_Luckychild on Chapter 14 Fri 25 Mar 2022 12:58AM UTC

    So... I just wanna say... If the virus is from 1 place.. the police will just... U know... Shut the place down.... Or close it's connection from internet by controlling the satelite... And if u need communication it can be by radio soo.... They just need to stop the the connection from the "main building" to outside and then the virus will stop... Or U know... Just blow/burn the building including the electronics... They don't need coding for that.... (Destroying the building and computer before anything happened)

    Like when i read the story i thought the hacker explaining to the police that the virus is from the building and so... When they found the building they woul've jammed the building and then work from there... And if it's imppossible to make "antivirus" just destroy the building including the electronics... Just.... They'rr professional and have been working for years right?? There is no way they don't know about this... Andd if there is electronics.. there must be a power supply somewhere... Just stop that andd it will be fine...

    This fanfic started so good, the way it's written is very good, i got the individuality of each character, but maybe work some more on the plot? And do some more research before plotting something or consult some friends....

    I really hope this is a constructive critisism... English is not my first language, so sorry if some of it is wierd

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    1. Passing_Ghost_Friend on Chapter 14 Fri 25 Mar 2022 01:26AM UTC

      Yeah. I am not proud of the decisions I made during the latter half of the story. But I think it was just me trying to finish the story in a hurry since I wanted to finish it quickly. I am aiming towards revising a bit of it during the summer, the latter half to work better according to some advice in this comment and another one about how to deal with the virus since it doesn’t really make sense plot wise (I don’t really know much about computers)

      But thank you for the slight criticism and for your comment.

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