This is so nice! It's great to see the two of them have a conversation - but some parts of it feel stilted. You got Harry's reaction to going to a Mind Healer right, but I feel like Harry would be a little angrier at being asked to talk about the Dursleys. The two aren't the same, in the sense that Harry's asking Ginny for help to get over his own issues, and Ginny's asking for...what? That's the only part of the chapter that feels a little forced. You can nix that part entirely and then have Harry volunteer some information of his own when he sees Ginny struggling with her words - that would, imho, make it flow better. Otherwise a fantastic chapter in a fantastic story! Love the hints about Harry improving himself as the story progresses, like in his conversation with Remus.
Thank you for the constructive criticism! Harry is still coming around to the idea of talking about his feelings, especially voluntarily, and even more so when it concerns the Dursleys. Ginny is only asking to prompt Harry to deal with his issues, that's the only thing she wants. Thank you for reading!
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