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1. NinjaMary (Guest) on Chapter 1 Thu 12 May 2022 02:22AM UTC

   Hello!
   Thank you for reading and commenting!
   I did Yuji's dream/memory in 1st person because I wanted to be though his perspective. I don't know if that answers your question. 😅
   If you see any mistakes or have any suggestions, feel free to voice them! It will help everyone enjoy the story better.
   Thank you again!!!! 😊

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2. 1. grbgcn2 on Chapter 1 Thu 12 May 2022 05:00AM UTC

      

      Ah I see. Are they all going to be like that from now on?

      I’m only asking cause to me, it seemed clunky, I guess to have it switch rom 3rd to 1st to 3rd again. I would recommend sticking to one so readers don’t get whiplash but that’s just what I think.

      Can’t wait to see where this goes!

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   2. 1. NinjaMary (Guest) on Chapter 1 Thu 12 May 2022 10:33AM UTC

         Hello! 😁
         I see! I was wondering, what if the whiplash feeling is intentional? It correlates with the confusing and disorienting feeling that Yuji feels when he wakes up.
         Thank you! ☺

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