Really good touch, that she did tunnel vision so much on getting the perfect replica that she forgot it just needed to be a sufficient forgery, keeps Momo from seeming dramatically out of character from her canon self! Also, that, even if she’s pretending to be older, she clearly does not understand the implications of some of the things she says. Great chapter!
Yeah this Momo is definitely different from canon due to the change in how she was raised, but I tried to keep enough aspects where it does feel like it has some core parts, just with different experiences (craving validation from her authority figure (Giran), enjoying some 'finer' things like tea, and of course a sense of studiousness and dedication that has her trying to perfectly replicate the green diamond without pausing to be like 'wait what if I just did the easy route?')
Although it can be fun to write someone hyper-competent, especially for a quirk like Momo's, I think it's interesting to find her weak points and where she fails, especially considering she's still a teenager (no matter how much she tries to act like an adult, unfortunately she still has blind spots and things she doesn't even know she doesn't understand yet). Thanks for reading!
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