This was so fucking GOOD! It was BEAUTIFUL! I had such high hopes and you blew them out of the water I am astounded. I just.. oh my god??? The way the story flowed so perfectly was just… mwah. It didn’t feel too long or too short, It introduced and got me attached to the dynamics and characters so amazingly and so quickly and it left me PRAYING for more of this. I am on my knees.
“The house, which shows signs of a life filled with much joy and warmth, is an empty hush of what it once was. Is nothing but a shell left over from the loss of that precious life. Is nothing but a ghost, stuck waiting for something that can never return. “ was such a gorgeous line that left stole the breath out of my lungs so shamelessly and so flawlessly i SCREAMED. The wording, the poetics, the flow of it is just. Oh my god.
“There was nothing Tommy could do to stop him from being angry, but he could do this and hope it helped. He wished it helped.” This line was so. It hit so close? Wilbur throughout this whole thing being described as angry and brash because he IS but he just wants the best for Tommy is so.. its so heart wrenchingly dear to my heart.
“Outside, the wind howled, the loose dirt pounding against the windows and forcing its way into their house. The clouds blocked out what little was left of the light and the room grew cold and dark. Tommy’s heart sped up into a panicked flutter as a scary look passed over Wilbur’s face.” I screamed this line is SO GOOD. It sets me into the scene perfectly without having to really describe that much, but i can SEE it you know? I can feel this scene in my skin. I know this feeling, this place, and ive never been there. That is INCREDIBLE.
“His mouth was moving, he was saying something, but all Tommy could hear was the pounding, pounding, pounding -“ the tension in this scene was so tight in my bones it hurt. It was so well done, well executed. I know this feeling. I can see through Tommys eyes right now, I can see what he is feeling and isn’t that incredible?? How i can visualize something so vividly in just a few words? You did that, man. Thats so amazing.
I can not wait for more of this. Im so. Trash, Im astonished. Im so happy.
Star you are my favorite person in the world rn. This made me so happy I started crying during *math*. I am printing this out and putting it on my wall. I really hope it stays this good for you I am so happy you enjoyed this.
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