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1. Nhobdy on Chapter 9 Sat 29 Apr 2023 04:15PM UTC

   

   (also - the stylistic choice at the end with paragraph breaks? works very well. I feel like it's always a gamble to do these things but it paid off here, especially as subsequent paragraphs also became shorter / direct, capturing how Barrett's world has suddenly narrowed from musing into fury)

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2. 1. Lithos_Maitreya on Chapter 9 Sat 29 Apr 2023 07:34PM UTC

      

      Glad you liked that! It's always scary to do wacky things with formatting like that, but sometimes that's the best way to hit the target.

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