Read this up to chapter 3 so far and collected my thoughts along the way:
You have a really good hold on the characters. Your dialogue has that perfect tone I love that matches the games just right while not being afraid to get a -little- more adventurous now and then. I especially liked Amy at the beginning and Knuckles during the dream sequence. I don't know if he's going to be showing up again, but he made me laugh repeatedly.
You're also really good at descriptive prose in general. I love your writing style, for a story like this it's exactly the kind of thing I love to read and I vibe really well with it.
Outside of that the plot itself is very fun so far. I really enjoy the concept of Tails, who is usually quite at home solving everything with gadgets and gizmos these days, having to rough it. It's a fun direction to take the character and a neat little direction to take the character for an unfamiliar sort of story with him. I adoooooored that dream sequence, I always love a good creepy shift into a nightmare and you pulled it off perfectly. I'm interested to see if it goes anywhere. Also, the part with the jaguar was really sweet. It got a little more violent than I expected but not in a bad way, and Tails stayed perfectly in character throughout it.
Sorry for the gigantic comment, just really enjoying this lol. Thank you very much for your writing.
Aaaah, thank you so so much for your feedback! This is my first fic (since like, middle school haha) so I'm just glad I'm able to buckle down and put pen to paper. It makes me so happy to hear that you've enjoyed what you read so far, and I hope you enjoy the rest. Thank you so much for reading!
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