Comment on separation in time

  1. Onori on Chapter 5 Mon 24 Jun 2024 08:42AM UTC

    We still follow the plot, but the mini changes are noticeable.

    That's Pepper's perspective 🧡 Poor her, she doesn't know what she'll see on Tony's face when Peter gets arrested.

     

    "He’s definitely like Miles.” Either Miles is (or will be) like Peter.

     

    Naming this ferry Titanic 02. Beautiful. Overall, the whole action was great. Peter's calculations were interesting and definitely added to his character. And I am of the opinion that Peter should get at least some appreciation from people for trying to hold both sides of the ferry with sheer force. It almost tore him apart, and if he hadn't held on long enough, some of those people would have drowned.

    Aunt May is probably watching the news and she's terrified. Ned should definitely watch this and not be positively excited 😑

     

    The argument went a little better but still..... Yup.... The commission will hurt and hit like a falling building. Oh Peter, get ready for the collar

    I'm not excited at all, I have no idea why you think that. I just want happiness and fluff here. Definitely

    Comment Actions

    1. webss312 on Chapter 5 Tue 25 Jun 2024 11:28PM UTC

      I also think Peter should get so much more credit for holding the Ferry together like even just doing the math that was an INSANE feat. I'm glad you liked the characterization though, I really enjoy writing his internal monologues. May definitely is terrified- we'll see that at the start of the next chapter! Ned... is still not quite with the program on the dangers, but he's getting there. There isn't a scene where he reacts particularly to watching the Ferry happen, but from his eyes he definitely wouldn't see it at this point as 'Peter got almost ripped apart' but rather 'Peter saved everyone on the ferry AND teamed up with Iron Man.' Peter doesn't have the particular desire to correct him, but Ned will definitely get his moment in regards to the Raft stuff finally.

      You're right on track for future events... and most definitely not excited at all ;) the fluff will come... eventually

      Comment Actions