Comment on if heaven was not ours

  1. SnowyDawn17 on Chapter 7 Sat 13 Jul 2024 07:32PM UTC

    “Ah, it was because he could feel what it was. How could he not? How could Kaveh, of all people, fail to recognize a tomb?”

    This bowled me over btw. I needed to Sit with this one. Lay down on the floor about it even. /pos

    “he was of the staunch belief that the best ideas were the ones you argued with yourself about in the shower, the true home of scholarship,“

    GOD SO TRUE THOUGH. SO TRUE.

    “The point was, Kaveh knew his own mind, and this–this was not him. It was as though someone else was truly speaking back to him, which was impossible,”

    I love this whole dream sequence but there’s Something to kaveh knowing his own thought process is Off here that enraptures me. It’s especially potent bc of how good your voice for him is I think, bc there *is* something off about it here? It’s still him, obviously, but it’s.. calmer? Directed? It’s incredibly subtle but it’s THERE and I’m just 💖 10/10 writing skill moment

    “Kaveh adjusted his grip on the handle, to settle his fingers over her small hand, feeling the illusion of warmth.”

    I love these two sooo much oh my god. They’re so similar and so gentle. They make my heart ache. I need them both to get wrapped in soft blankets Stat

    “In a sense. You fainted as the elevator ascended…”

    Okay but can we talk about how kaveh screamed “FLIRTING?!!!!?” at the top of his lungs and then immediately passed out? If they weren’t in danger none of his friends would ever let him live this down. The idea of flirting with (his husband) Alhaitham was so distressing it killed him on the spot. Dehya is bullying at least ONE of them about this eventually

    “But I’m glad…if I could speak to someone, that it was you, Master Kaveh.”

    KAVEH IS NAHIDA’S FAVORITE!!!!

    “Alhaitham’s voice was so dry it was almost acidic against his ear, his worry so poorly disguised even Kaveh heard it”

    At least he’s marginally self aware <3
    Also, again: the things I would do to see outside kaveh’s pov of these situations. I simply want to see Alhaitham losing his shit out of love & worry. It’s about the protective rage <3

    “Kaveh,” Cyno interrupted with the weariest look on his face. “Are you alright?”

    Remember when cyno thought Alhaitham was mysterious & calculating and kaveh was a reasonable man? So does cyno. Cyno would like to go back to those days, thank you very much.
    Fr thought kaveh’s best friends with Tighnari, cyno. He had to be as least a LITTLE unhinged

    “He could not have explained to them what drove him, anyway–how was he to speak of the sad, lonely look in the eyes of a god? His eyes still burned at the thought of it, of the thought of little Devi Kusanali, who had saved those who had forgotten her. Who wanted to save them still.”

    Curls up into a ball on the floor and cries. What if my heart explodes, huh. What then.

    “He was more surprised when Alhaitham was just there, already reaching for the tablet in his hands without a word.”

    Like he’d ever be anywhere else??? Smh kaveh I thought you were supposed to be able to predict him

    “When he stared at the Traveler too long, he saw that she had understood his doubts in silence, and he began to fear she’d answer them.”

    Have i mentioned I love ur Lumine. I love everything going on with her always.

    “Without thinking, Kaveh stepped forward, directly into Alhaitham’s arm,”

    God just. This whole bit. Kaveh’s instinctual response. Alhaitham Knowing him. Alhaitham’s worry and anger and desperation. Ugh I’m soooo. /pos

    “She sounded…quite terribly lonely.” There was no mistaking the way Lumine’s face fell, or her eyes clouded. She was not worried for the god of a nation. This girl, this strange girl with ancient eyes, was worried about a friend.”

    UGH IM SOOOOO. /pos
    You’re so damn GOOD at conveying emotions, both within kaveh’s own voice and in the characters around him. You have such a masterful grasp of limited pov im out here wanting to take NOTES

    Also again: everything happening with your Lumine makes me FEEL things. Vague ephemeral cosmic things that I adore but can’t put to words. I love her moments so much.

    “Lumine stared up at him, startled, and then smiled, weak and wavering and terribly brave.”

    And what if I cry. What if I sob, even. There is something about quiet, wobbling bravery that sends me to my knees & you hit every button I have about it 💖

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