Well- no, it’s not a distraction at all, it’s an investigation of the same thing he would want a distraction from – his hand heats warningly and he lets go of the steering wheel with the ease of much practice, before it can start steaming. and Aye’s going to take a photo of the first, last, and one random document in every drawer he manages to open before the sun comes up. It’s a quick decision. He’s been making a lot of those lately. he's so in over his head and trying to so hard and fraying at the seams.
He shakes his head and looks ahead and, uncinematic as it is, enters through an ordinary side door. it’s an interesting trait of your Aye, how often he seems to be watching himself when he gets into villain mode. Which makes sense obviously, since he is playing a role. But yeah. Interesting. I like it a lot!
no longer that tiny, secret bit of intimidated by the dark :3 :3 :3 and him getting lost in his own thoughts. That’s so relatable.
entirely about small fires that can grow that’s my teenage anarchist Orwell’s fan!
but he fixes his mind on the moment of realisation, when Solis took his fire and kept his fire, and he feels winded from the memory of it… and something of the memory of Shade getting the jump on him, too, feels like that. sooo interesting that he explicitely link these two moments. I'd love to get the making-of of that line, if you remember!
Aye tilts his head back, reaches inside himself to feel that his fire is actually back, not stolen forever like in that nightma- He tilts his head back and is confident. Then he looks and is… something else. Not unconfident, not like the lanky and looming boy standing before him had seemed, when claiming that his boss was a good guy, or something, and Aye grins at the memory. Tries to make the grin a hard one. SO much in these few sentences almhgufytdr
So… how tiny are the shorts? Just to know how strong Akk is trying to be. And can I also ask why you chose the initials AFC? It feels like and easter egg, something we're expected to recognize, and yet.
The warrant conversatioooon!!! It’s so them that I have little hearts popping up around my head. You tell your future boyfriend, Aye! Also the whole thing is, obviously, tense, but also exciting and funny, and the way you described shadow-walking seen through heat powers was so cool… and then reality crashing down with of one of them actually being injured and neither of them actually wanting that... so good.
An image, vivid and gutting, of Shade whimpering, ignored and in pain on the ground between Aye and the man he calls master, flashes into his mind. Pretty much anything else, then. Oh no oh no oh no. my kids. and now Flare has someone to save.
He's ENTIRELY in over his head, yeah. This was the main thing I wanted to do, actually, when I decided to expand the universe from that Akk PoV oneshot - in that one, Flare seems so self-assured, because it's Akk PoV so he has to, but of course it's Ayan in there. Just a teenager, like him, and (in this universe) dealing with life-and-death and terror as well as the usual desperate grief.
I think Ayan needs to be out of his own head and watching himself or he'll freeze up, a bit, when he's doing all this dangerous stuff. There are a few differences in how I use "Flare"/"Aye" versus "Shade"/"Akk" in their personal PoVs, that I think reflect how long each of them has been doing it but also how well-adjusted they both are to their secret and personal identities. :D
I love my little teenage anarchist yeah. The only OOC thing about him here is, I think, that he's not reading enough theory :/
Now I can't remember in toooo much detail what I was thinking when I wrote that, but I know I wanted to do a few different things, here. I'm developing Aye's powers, as in what the reader can know about them, while at the same time increasing his own control over them - which means I have to also be sending him on a little emotional journey, because powers are always about emotion. His training arc, right now, is at "there is a bigger threat with more control over his powers and mine" - so there needs to be a Chadok reference, but of course his emotional arc is "wow this Shade sure is... interesting. Suspicious, even," so he's going to be connecting the power-threat to the (subconscious) emotional threat, here.
The shorts are pretty tiny, yeah. Unfortunately the longer ones kept riding up, and he can't get anything made special without his mum noticing something's up. Think mini-shorts.
I CAN'T REMEMBER WHAT AFC STOOD FOR :C That's in the planning notebook I forgot in the UK, alas :'(
The warrant conversatioooon!!! It’s so them that I have little hearts popping up around my head. You tell your future boyfriend, Aye! Also the whole thing is, obviously, tense, but also exciting and funny, and the way you described shadow-walking seen through heat powers was so cool… and then reality crashing down with of one of them actually being injured and neither of them actually wanting that... so good. :D :D If I write an AU and put my blorbos in silly costumes it is with the sole purpose of making them as them as I possibly, possibly can. :D :D And this is the moment when the silly costumes and the nice flirting meet the danger sirens (it's kind of supposed to mirror them getting outed, but earlier and less catastrophic - just oh shit, there was a plot we forgot because we were busy flirting).
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