Comment on Where the Tide Broke

  1. Dustnil on Chapter 4 Sat 19 Jul 2025 08:58PM UTC

    I appreciate your comment, and I want to address some things: even early on, I wanted this particular story to be short, but not too short that I sacrificed quality.

    The first two chapters came quickly and much easier than the final two. For example, as I wrote chapter one, I was also writing parts of chapter two, and little bits of chapter three. Chapter four was written almost entirely in its own bubble with a blank page.

    I scrapped a lot of scenes, believe it or not. Originally, I intended for Taylor to be the sole viewpoint character. Both her and Saitama were even set to have a storyline through the Leviathan fight with Taylor slowly realizing that Saitama was more than he let on as she went around helping people, culminating in him defeating Leviathan. Her storyline would end in her realizing that there were adults with power that could be relied on, and she would end the story with a sense of hope for the future with Coil, Dinah, and the Undersiders. She would also get benefit with the authorities from knowing Saitama as she would know him the best.

    I scrapped this plot thread as I wanted Saitama to end things relatively quickly with Leviathan and avoid heavy casualties. It might not seem like it with what was posted, but this battle was short compared to what it originally was. I actually miss that I didn't put those scenes in this story somehow, but after I had the viewpoint character change in chapter two, I didn't want to repeat viewpoints, except maybe in the Epilogue, like a coming full circle kind of thing.

    Moving on, when I was drafting chapter three, it was almost going to become two chapters itself. As it is, it dwarfs both chapter one and two combined, and that was just what made it through. You might have problems with the pacing, but chapter three is the result of me trying to cut things down. I even shortened chapter three and combined it with what might have been an extra chapter to wrap things up as fast as possible.

    There was almost not even going to be an epilogue. However, I realized that not including a wrap up / consequences chapter would dissatisfy my audience, so I had to push myself to churn out one more chapter. I also wanted the chapter to show that Saitama could be affected by the world of Parahumans just as he affected theirs.

    Anyway, I appreciate your comment, and just know that what you got was much shorter than what you might have gotten.

    Last Edited Thu 31 Jul 2025 06:42PM UTC

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