Things to add to the fic: -Cannibalism -Hallucinations -Somebody really fucking concerned for OJ -SH -Almost meeting Paper, but unfortunately no -Starving or overeating -Some of the pain, if not a lot, should also go to OJ's stomach, chest, or neck. Nothing going on there except his fucked up self after Paper's death -Graphic description in a flashbacks or memories sense of how it was when OJ found Paper's dead body, along with more clarification on what Paper did and what he was like a few days before the suicide -Little peeks on how it's affecting other contestants and mainly other people who were close to Paper, while it's mainly about OJ, seeing that a bit would be pretty cool! (The Cherries count. So does every contestant but still) -Overly realistic nightmares -If OJ is to step out of his room, again, this should go for the "somebody's worried" thing I mentioned earlier. -Cried so bad that eyes hurt -Even the smallest unexpected sound should be overwhelming or scary for OJ. He might get really mad A LOT easier. -Considering how badly it's clearly affecting OJ, it should be more highlighted that OJ may be struggling to process anything that goes on (including time! it was very noticeable how OJ kept having time go either too fast or too slow here)
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Jugozana on Chapter 2 Mon 18 Aug 2025 11:38PM UTC
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