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This whole thing could have been prevented. If Andy hadn't forgotten Miranda's coffee; if Miranda had left her office only a minute later; if Andy hadn't been laden down with shopping bags; if Miranda had looked to her right when passing Irv's secretary's desk; if she'd knocked on the door instead of barging in; if the November issue hadn't gone over budget, garnering that meeting, they wouldn't have been in this mess.
Andy and Miranda find themselves in a pickle. And in western US.
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Short version:
Wow. This sucks so bad. My theory is that this is really, really old and ZoS didn’t reread it before she published it or it was actually written for a different fandom entirely or as an original piece.
But still that doesn’t exactly account for how profoundly sucky this is: The plot is nonsense, the characters are incapable of rational thought or empathy. Not a real adult human emotion within a fifty yard radius.
Please let it be true that ZoS wrote this garbage when she was 15.
Long Version:
ZoS is usually competent. But this piece sucks So Bad. My theories is that it’s either that it’s really, really old (written as a fifteen year old perhaps) and she didn’t reread it before she published it or it was actually written for a different fandom entirely or as an original piece.
First off: I can get on board with broad strokes no research vibes only witness protection stuff but the way it’s set up with extraneous jurisdictional haggling… nobody cares. Cut that shit.
Then, of course, generic small town with generic people. (And not for nothing but as described, this generic small town is too small to actually sustain a Walmart. Say you don’t know anything about small towns without knowing anything about small towns x2 lol)
Andy’s inner monologue is super condescending about this fake generic small town, and Miranda is an insufferable snob, and all their interactions are very 12-year-old slap fights.
“Miranda was too pragmatic to know how to deal with an onslaught of emotions. She was filled with so much anger and frustration with no idea where to channel them. Ordinarily, she would channel them into work, but that, too, had been taken away from her.”
That’s very much not what pragmatic means.
And throughout there’s some kind of “cinematic” thing with flashes of “objective” POV. But really the POV changes are jarring and stupid. I’d say it would be more effective if we stayed in one character’s POV, but exactly zero characters here feel like real people, so what does it matter lol
The climax has Generic Man saving the day. A fitting end for a story where the protagonists are children with no real agency, I suppose.
Overall, an interesting premise fumbled very badly in several different ways.