I don't know if you researched your heart and blood pressure measurements but that's like almost death range and he wouldn't be able to just do the equivalent of "walking it off". Plus in the next chapter you mention a pacemaker. Those are designed to regulate your heart rhythm and generally are set at about 70. It makes sure your heart pumps that fast, but also ensures it doesn't go much higher than that. I don't know enough about BP to give correct ranges for those but I know if it was my story I'd want the information to be accurate and would hope someone would point it out. Sorry if this offends you, I promise that wasn't th3 point! I'm really enjoying this story!
Hello! I actually have a condition that raises my heartrate that high regularly and keeps my blood pressure extremely low. 87/63 is just past the threshold of hypotension, which isn't great but he wouldn't have died. I don't want to sound defensive but Leo's experiences with disability in this story are directly taken from my own. On a bad day, this is something that has happened to me. HOWEVER I dont have a pacemaker and I should have considered that! I will resolve this in later chapters, you've given me a wonderful, terrible idea :) I'm glad you've been enjoying the story and I appreciate your concern!
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