The main reason I point this out because, game wise it made a great visual and cues player that he's coming. But as a Shinobi, that will kill Minato. His enemies will be able to predict his trajectory and evade if they are quick enough. Flashy Shinobi is dead Shinobi. Perhaps you could add that rather than a flash, his version of Hiraishin leave shimmer of chakra signalling that it's taking place but not enough to signal his enemies that he's coming. That would balance out this rather fatal description of Minato's technique. So that means he leaves an after image that is like a flash to his enemies but he's already gone from that position. I am only suggesting this slight correction to add to the deadliness of Minato's signature jutsu because I happen to really like your story. This way you don't have to change what you already written but add to the story to 'correct' what you had already written. I tended to do this when I realized something about the previous chapter that makes no sense but use the future chapter to give a reason why the previous chapter is written as it is. Just something from one author to another.
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Makuro767 on Chapter 5 Mon 02 Oct 2023 09:03AM UTC
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