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Part 339 of Awareness stories , Part 156 of Therapy stories , Part 424 of collection stories , Part 6 of Under the Sea, Part 28 of personal favs
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2024-03-17
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2024-09-23
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Vanessa's Tale

Summary:

This prequel, set 25 years before the live-action The Little Mermaid events, reveals Princess Vanessa of Aigygo's tale. Princess Vanessa and Prince Merrick of Merrow's love story unfolds into a tragic and compelling tale of love and loss in a world where the boundaries between land and sea are blurred.

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The first picture is an AI of young evil Ursula.

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Character Depth: You've introduced several characters, but there's more room to delve deeper into their personalities, motivations, and inner conflicts. Adding more layers to characters like Queen Lorelei and Queen Aquamarine can make them more compelling and relatable to the readers.

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Overall, you have a strong foundation for a captivating narrative. Refining your characters, dialogue, pacing, and conflict development can elevate your writing to the next level and create a compelling story. Keep up the great work!

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Chapter 1: Story Index

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pixai-Young Evil Ursula

 

 

Vanessa's Tale Story Index

I've compiled this index to help readers recall important details and themes from "Vanessa's Tale," adding depth to the fanfiction experience.

 

 

 

Theme Song

  Song Title: Tides of Destiny

 

 

 

In a world where kingdoms above and beneath the waves intertwine,

Love and power collide, hearts yearning for more divine.

Kings and queens’ tales unfold, dreams soar, then fall,

In the ocean's shadow, destiny's call enthralls.

Oh, the tides of destiny, they rise, they fall,

In light and darkness dance, heed the ocean's call.

Through storms and calm, fates intertwine,

In the tides of destiny, true hearts align.

Princess lost in sorrow, a queen with schemes so dark,

A prince is seeking his courage, a spark to light his heart.

Beneath the sea, above the waves, the struggle comes alive,

In the mirror of our choices, our true selves we derive.

Oh, the tides of destiny, they rise, they fall,

In light and darkness dance, heed the ocean's call.

Through storms and calm, fates intertwine,

In the tides of destiny, true hearts align.

When shadows fall and hope seems gone,

Look to the sea, where dreams are drawn.

In every wave, a story's told,

Of love and loss, of brave and bold.

A father lost to treachery, a mother's cruel command,

Yet hope remains in hearts that dream and in the strength of hands.

With courage as their compass, they'll navigate the night,

To find a dawn where love prevails and darkness turns to light.

Oh, the tides of destiny, they rise, they fall,

In light and darkness dance, heed the ocean's call.

Through storms and calm, fates intertwine,

In the tides of destiny, our true selves we will find.

So heed the call of the ocean's roar, and listen to the breeze,

In the ebb and flow of life, we find our destinies.

For in the depths and heights we climb, our spirits will align,

In the tides of destiny, our true selves we will find.

 

 

Chapter Index

Chapter 1: Story Index

Chapter 2: Prologue: Introducing both royal families.

Chapter 3: Lost at Sea: King Jericho faces a storm, his ship sinking.

Chapter 4: Grieving: Vanessa and Merrick mourn a loving parent amidst an abusive family.

Chapter 5:  The island empire of Aigygo lies in ruins under the tyrannical rule of Queen Lorelei, who seized power after the king's disappearance.

Movie Cast

 

For fun, imagine actors who could bring "Vanessa's Tale" to life on the big screen based on the 2023 live-action Little Mermaid.

King Jericho: Chris Hemsworth

Queen Lorelei: Charlize Theron

Prince Marco: Tom Holland

Prince Merrick: Jacob Tremblay

Queen Aquamarine: Cate Blanchett

Young Ursula: Helena Bonham Carter

Madame Minerva: Julie Andrews

Lady Elara: Jessica Chastain

Sir Cedric: Gerard Butler

Lady Nerissa: Lily James

Captain Thalass: Idris Elba

King Aalto: Jason Isaacs

 

Royal Family of Aigygo and Staff

King Jericho: Handsome, just, adventurous, compassionate father.

Queen Lorelei: Rare beauty, judgmental, overprotective, sometimes cold-hearted.

Princess Vanessa: Beautiful, adventurous, kind-hearted, dreams of romance, a bit naive.

Madame Minerva: Palace Music teacher, supportive godmother figure.

Lady Elara: Compassionate, wise, empathetic confidante of Vanessa.

Sir Cedric: Loyal, brave knight, advisor, protector.

Royal Family of Merrow

King Aalto: Similar to King Triton but unintentionally neglectful, struggles with emotional expression.

Queen Aquamarine: Beautiful, unhappy in marriage, feels neglected.

Prince Marco: Perfect son in his father's eyes, confident, sometimes disrespectful.

Prince Merrick: Neglected by his father, seeks approval, and is close to his mother.

Lady Nerissa: Spirited, curious mermaid, friend, and confidante to Merrick.

Captain Thalass: Seasoned, respected merman, leader of the navy, and mentor to Merrick and Nerissa.